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因为读后续写的批改是迎合中国人的阅读品味，而我们中国老师最深刻记得的还是中国作家的散文和小说的味道。而中国经典散文确实有不少是能引起读者的共鸣的。我平时也会有意去认真揣摩他们的作品的语句，当然会结合名家翻译。下面是基于张培基的翻译。
1. 读后续写在末段经常回到回忆式感慨，但很多都是Years later开头，我在冰心的作品翻译里看到这样的，觉得非常不错：
I giggled in his arms, not knowing what it was like to be eaten up by a wolf. Today, nevertheless, the small incident never fails to strike fear in me whenever I recall it.（strike tewww.58yuanyou.comrror into...只能表示害怕）
这一句，把now和future给connect完美连起来了，可以形成一个公式：
实时场景（画面定格）+Today, nevertheless, ... never fails to remind me of...(主题关键词） in me whenever I recall it.
举个例子，以浙江高考为例，请翻译：
看到祖母因为好忘而自责的神态，我们都笑了。然而今天每当我想起此事，它总会让我想起她的幽默和善良。
详细解释：
《我差点被狼吃了！》
冰心写于1990年4月的一篇散文。作者回忆了她童年时代的一段惊险经历，文章写于晚年，但仍流露出她早期作品的风格，如对童心和童年时代的憧憬、对父母的挚爱、对自然景物的赞赏（如文中的蒲公英、山坡、海等）。
原文：
我跑上了旗台，父亲把我紧紧地搂在怀里说：“刚才追在你后面的是一只狼！不是我砸了石板把它吓跑了，你早就让它吃了。以后在这么晚的时候千万不要自己一个人出来，听见没有？”那时我在父亲怀里只是嘻嘻地笑着，我想像不出被狼咬着吃了是什么感觉。现在回想起来却有一种“后怕”。
Up on the platform, father huggedme closely in his arms and said, "It was a wolf that pursued you just no原由网w! Had I not frightened it away by smashing the slate, it would have eaten you up. From now on, don't come out by yourself after dark. Understand?" I giggled in his arms, not knowing what it was like to be eaten up by a wolf. Today, nevertheless, the small incident never fails to strike fear in me whenever I recall it.
附加：还是上面的文章里的一句：这一切只发生在几秒钟的时间。
All that lasted but a few seconds或 All that lasted for a matter of seconds，其中a matter of是成语，作“仅仅”解。
2. 这句结尾，属于回忆中相见：
Every time I approach my gate on returning home,I will see her in my mind's eye greeting me with a smiling face and a gentle voice.
句式：
Every time ..., I will see sb in my mind's eye greeting me with ...
or:
Whenever I stand looking about on the steps leading to the room, the sight of her saying goodbye to our home for the last time will invariably appear vividly before my eyes: Neatly dressed, she looked somewhat impatient and melancholy and meanwhile also seemed to feel quite hopeful about things to come.
这个句子更有魔力了，有点类似于毛主席的: 待到山花烂漫时，她在丛中笑。
不过要说明的是，我们的读后续写最好在里面融入感慨，譬如：还是以浙江的高考为例：
每当我回想那个暑假，祖母因为好忘而自责的一幕就生动地出现在我们的面前：小心打开包，一脸茫然，但很快又非常乐观，高兴地设计另外要给计划。
附加：
内心表达：How I felt like uttering a couple of loud yells to give vent to my agony!
原文：
再忆萧珊
O巴金
昨夜梦见萧珊，她拉住我的手，说：“你怎么成了这个样子？”
我安慰她：“我不要//www.58yuanyou.com紧。”她哭起来。我心里难过，就醒了。
。。。
我用铺盖蒙住脸。我真想大叫两声。我快要给憋死了。“我到哪里去找她？！”我连声追问自己。于是我又回到了华东医院的病房。耳边仍是早已习惯的耳鸣。
她离开我十二年了。十二年，多么长的日日夜夜！每次我回到家门口，眼前就出现一张笑脸，一个亲切的声音向我迎来，可是走进院子，却只见www.58yuanyou.com一些高高矮矮的没有花的绿树。上了台阶，我环顾四周，她最后一次离家的情景还历历在目：她穿得整整齐齐，有些急躁，有点伤感，又似乎充满希望，走到门口还回头张望。……仿佛车子才开走不久，大门刚刚关上。不，她不是从这两扇绿色大铁门出去的。以前门铃也没有这样悦耳的声音。十二年前更不会有开门进来的挎书包的小姑娘。……为什么偏偏她的面影不能在这里再现？为什么不让她看见活泼可爱的小端端？
选这篇主要是我被其中内心表达打动了，且看翻译：
Last night I met Xiao Shan again in a dream. She held me by the handandasked,"What's up, dear? You're a wreck.""I'm all right,"I answered consolingly. Then she wept. And I woke up with grief in my heart.
。。。
I buried my face in a bed sheet. How I felt like uttering a couple of loud yells to give vent to my agony! I was just suffocating. "Where on earth can I ever find her again?" I kept asking myself. Then I was back in my Huadong Hospital, my ears tingling as usual.
It's twelve years since she left me. Ah, twelve long years with its countless days and nights! Every time I approach my gate on returning home,I will see her in my mind's eye greeting me with a smiling face anda gentle voice.But, when I step into the courtyard,I will see nothing but some flowerless green trees of various heights. Whenever I stand looking about on the steps leading to the room, the sight 原由网of her saying goodbye to our home for the last time will invariably appear vividly before my eyes: Neatly dressed, she looked somewhat impatient and melancholy and meanwhile also seemed to feel quite hopeful about things to come. When she was at the gate, she turned her head to give a look around... It seems like the car carrying her away has just left and the gate has just shut. No, she didn't leave by the two big green iron leaves of the gate. And the doorbell at that time wasn't so musical either. Twelve years ago, there wasn't a little girl entering the gate with a satchel on her back. why shouldn't Xiao Shan's face reappear at the gate? Why shouldn't she be here to see our lovely granddaughter Litle Duan Duan?
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